Blog Prompt 3

I couldn't find very many errors that I hadn't already tried to fix or that specifically fit the grammar rules we covered, so I altered some sentences.

Error #1:

Original sentence: Our university has held it up as something to be feared: the bringer of stress and bad grades, failure and ultimately doomsday.

Problem: parallelism; rule- express paired items and items in a series in parallel form

Correction: Our university has held it up as something to be feared: the bringer of stress, bad grades, failure, and ultimately doomsday.

Error #2:

Original sentence: Our university has held it up as something to be feared: the bringer of stress, bad grades, failure, and ultimately doomsday.

Problem: ambiguity with pronouns; rule- avoid ambiguity with pronouns

Correction: Our university has held procrastination up as something to be feared: the bringer of stress, bad grades, failure, and ultimately doomsday.

Error #3:

Original sentence: Waiting a few minutes, or hours, or days or even weeks can seem like a small thing at the time, but it all adds up.

Problem: parallelism; rule- express paired items and items in a series in parallel form

Correction: Waiting a few minutes, hours, days, or even weeks can seem like a small thing at the time, but it all adds up.

Error #4:

Original sentence: Waiting a few minutes, hours, days, or even weeks can seem like a small thing at the time, but it all adds up.

Problem: ambiguity with pronouns; avoid ambiguity with pronouns

Correction: Waiting a few minutes, hours, days, or even weeks can seem like a small thing at the time, but all that time adds up.

Error #5:

Original sentence: Managing procrastination is like a planned snooze button wake up routine.

Problem: parallelism; verb forms should match

Correction: Managing procrastination is like planning a snooze button wake up routine.